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 31-07-13 19:51startpost
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Deze is m'n nieuwe, ben er onzeker over: Somtimes i feel me very sad, Becaue, There is so mutch unneeded dead, In our world, I don’t know who you are, But your dead, Make’s me, Very sad, 1000 persons die, Every day, I don’t gonna lie, Rest in peace, you little nobody, Npbody here knows your name, Yeah, i know, It’s always the same, Because i not gonna lie, Unneeded dead, Not enough food, I hate it, I’s not good, Rest in peace, And remember, I will cry for you, On my knees, Why? That’s my question, Why you have to die? Why you, strong nobody, You will change the world, But please, don’t die, Your wife and children, Why, oh God, why?! O damn, the war, You have to fight, Then you die, In the lighting of the sunlight, God, do somthing! This can’t be true, A woman ask you to let her husband life, Because she loves you ! That kind of dead, Hurts me, I’m very sad, Rest in peace, you little nobody .. |
| 31-07-13 20:06 reactie 1
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Zitten een paar kleine type-foutjes tussen, heb ze ff voor je verbetert. Verder echt mooi gedicht. Zonde om onzeker te zijn over zo'n mooi gedicht Sometimes I feel me very sad, Because, There is so much unneeded dead, In our world, I don’t know who you are, But your dead, Make’s me, Very sad, 1000 persons die, Every day, I don’t gonna lie, Rest in peace, you little nobody, Nobody here knows your name, Yeah, i know, It’s always the same, Because i not gonna lie, Unneeded dead, Not enough food, I hate it, I’s not good, Rest in peace, And remember, I will cry for you, On my knees, Why? That’s my question, Why you have to die? Why you, strong nobody, You will change the world, But please, don’t die, Your wife and children, Why, oh God, why?! O damn, the war, You have to fight, Then you die, In the lighting of the sunlight, God, do something! This can’t be true, A woman ask you to let her husband life, Because she loves you ! That kind of dead, Hurts me, I’m very sad, Rest in peace, you little nobody .. |
| 01-08-13 18:06 reactie 2
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Bedankt, Patros  |
| 01-08-13 18:15 reactie 3
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